well some friends told me to put it somewhere so ill put it somewhere itll never get read hehehehe just ignore this post completly

Sorrow
ive lived in sorrow all my life
ive lived in darkness too
because ive lived without a friend
thinking my friend was you
i tried to ease my troubled sorrow
by turning sadness to pain
but than you left me and i never lived again
because this life of sadness
this life without a friend
was passed down along to me
i made sure it would not be passed again
but than as i dropped one thousand feet
i saw you once again
i saw you in your glory
shining bright like a star
i fell my thousand feet down under
but my heart is still not far
thought of you
your bright warm smile
i thought of your sweet face

ok goodbye

thats really good. strong feelings. but also, as ive posted elswhere, this poem would be alot less awkward without so much of the rhyming. poems do not have to rhyme

very good., and good luck with your rhyming!

*sniff* All the poems I've read today are making me cry!

Aw.. I like it. I know you said not to read it, but it's here so of course I'm going to read it. haha.

There's just one problem though.. You mixed up "then" with "than" in two lines:

I can relate to that. It's beautiful.

ummmm ty i guess.....actually they told me to put it in a competition so i did and well yeah

i wont ignore it is good. i liek it. reminds me of this one boy who cant get the facts straight grr..

well actually the poem was inspired by the anime series naruto its sad

Its pretty good..i should post some of mine somewheres...