crayons and swing sets
hide and go seek
the sounds of youth
fading from our ears
like a long lost hello
a moment - it's gone
a new beginning

car keys and credit cards
taking over
and trying to consume
but we blaze on with splendor
creating our own world of extravagance
finding our luster
and defining our future

I like it.
The last two lines of each stanza really appeal to me.

ah
thanks
it took me a surprisingly long time to get it the way i like it

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-mzkandi

I'm not sure why I feel like this doesn't fit very well...


I love this quote.

Overall, I think it's very good.

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its that first stanza that does it for me!! it just realli describes the long lost childhood memorys!!