Requited inabilities hinder reqium inadequicies,
Intricately settled by simply common feelings.
Gestures awaken the physical soul aroused asunder,
And the contact of bodies raise the impitent.

The candied practice of love we fail to share splits into oblivion.
All intimacy washed away unforgiven.
Passionate love romances the beauty from betwixt out eyes,
And we are set free into liberty above.

I like the meaning you state in this. The first stanza talks about I think falling in love and what is it like. The second states the break up. (If I'm interpreting this the right way.)

I think the transition between the two stanzas is sudden. Perhaps a stanza or two about what usually happens after you go through the first stage of a relationship.

Is this about a certain baby that was "supposed to be yours" as you put it? j/k. It's good.

Haha. Actually...haha. No, I wrote this before that. I wrote this probably last summer before TRILBY broke up with me. I was having a good day.

So wait....this was supposed to be happy? I completely missed that. Here's a critique that you can use for your other stuff as well. Stop using huge words. Just because you can doesnt mean you should. True, it sounds intelligent but loses it's meaning. It is actually more difficult to express what you're trying to say using simplified words than complicated words. You should try implementing both in your writing.

Haha. Those lines sound depressing?

The poem is about sex or foreplay ultimately. Read it again knowing that.

"All intimacy washed away unforgiven."

Beautiful line. I love it. [the whole poem, I mean. and the line. that's beautiful] hahaha.

It flows well.