poetwritremokid
Feb 6 2007, 12:41 PM
When you say goodbye,
It hurts so much inside,
My love will last,
As the days go past,
That will never change
You will never know,
That I love you so,
I want to show you how,
With my emotions now,
That will never happen
Soon my love love will be,
Engraved in your heart,
Then our love will never,
part! Then, That will
never change!
There are voices inside my head,
They tell me that you are bad,
But deap inside my heart,
It feels that you're the one!
Will I ever know?
What you have felt,
Will it be by force?
Or will you show,
the emotions of your heart?
I hope, That will never change.
For months my heart has lasted,
It gets stronger by the minute,
Will it last? Onlly time,
will tell and his heart,
will deside.....
I need to have you,
If not my life will seem to end,
My heart now soon beats faster and faster,
Till you will come to your desicion,
My mind will soon make up its mind,
And will lose its touch for the feelings,
I have for you, Only if you let me....
poetwritremokid
Feb 11 2007, 01:54 PM
can <s>someone</s> please rate this or something?
Uronacid
Feb 13 2007, 11:25 PM
QUOTE(*.brokendoll.* @ Feb 11 2007, 1:54 PM)

can <s>someone</s> please rate this or something?
Hey man... I would love to hear this put to music. As far as I can tell it sounds good. I guess I can't just judge a song by the way it's written. Do you have this recorded. I would love to hear it, and give you my opinion.
poetwritremokid
Feb 14 2007, 08:53 PM
I have not yet came with many music to this....I will try...
oXMuhNirvanaXo
Feb 19 2007, 10:57 PM
This one is better then the other 2 I have read of yours. This would sound really good with music. Nice job.
MrStrife
Feb 19 2007, 11:33 PM
Do you play an instrument?
multifaceted
Feb 19 2007, 11:51 PM
Please don't double post. Give people some time to respond.
I like this as lot. I tried humming a tune alone with it and it goes pretty well. The rhythm is very steady.
Nice work.
poetwritremokid
Feb 20 2007, 06:07 PM
Hi. yes I play an instrument. I play viola, piano, and guitar. I also sing so I might be able to record it if i can think of music to it.
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