I am only in grade 6, cut me some slack! lol, well, i came up with this poem in like 5 minuets at my grandpas during summer break so i decided to post it


~*Voyage to heaven*~

The worlds harsh troubles bite at me
With every step I take
But God's voice is in my ear telling me what move to make
Up ahead I see a light, bright and shining in the night
God has led me to ths place
And now I see His smiling face
He embraces me with care
leading me to the heaven we'll share
I close my eyes and drift to sleep
Knowing I will no longer weep
From the worlds spinning troubles
To God's great light
What I found in the night












I wrote this to sorta get over the fact my unvle died i guess, its about a persons journey to heaven at the end of life. Oh yea, and the last line "What i found in the night' is just saying they found heaven.

Comments appreciated!

This is damn good, everything that makes a poem great is there, you can almost picture what the words are saying, how long have you been writing?

You're in 6th grade 0.0

wow this is reallyy good
your a really good writer -- & your a 6th grader :]

*blushes* hehe...Not very long, I just write oure feelings, thats it...

I know it's REALLy late to reply, so I might get in trouble, but I haven't been on in the past few months...^_^''