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lumpy
i wrote this about a girl kinda. it's not really a song, because there isn't a chorus or anything and i know that songs don't need a chorus to be a song, and a poem...well songs are poems...and a sonnet...well because its about a girl and love and all that kind of stuff. heh. tell me what you think or what i can do to improve it?!? k thanks



Smile While You Cry



a smile a frown, thats all i can ever read from your beautiful face. nothing is more confusing then seeing you smile while you cry. this fire is slowley going out, the rain won't touch it. for eternity we lay in this bed, you run your hand thru my hair, nothing can go wrong, no not this time. i just wanna be the one, i just never want to let go. things arn't so complicated no more.all this time you've been mine, Heaven sent an angel and i hope to hang on. it's amazing how much i obsess over you, yet we've never met, only connected, remember when you said that this would last forever? i hope your right, because tonight is the night where i ask you to never let go.

i think that possibly the mixed signals will take us further then ever before. no stopping no ending, the next time you smile while crying, remember that i love you more then ever. not because your beautiful, because your my world, a world with no litter and thats a perfect world for me. we thought that unseperatable was what we were, but now thats not quite the world. you alone with me, me alone with you, what a perfect thing. best friends since day one, we never thought that the sun would go down. your eyes sparkling as the sun goes down is a memory that will last longer then a kodak picture.

this isn't a weakness, it's a strength seeing you smile everyday is like a dream come true, the sun has never shined any brighter, because theres a million words that could describe how i feel, but one would sum it up, its too hard to explain, but when our hands meet, i know you know what i mean.
lil_blue04
Wow! The ending was definately the best part. If this was made into a song, I would definately hear it.
oXMuhNirvanaXo
I love this.. You did such a good job!
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