This is my most sentimental peice, i wrote this after watching the movie MONSTER. Please rate it on a scale of 1-10. Thank You.



I'm shaking and beaten

Cold and near dead

I step in the shower

And the water runs red

I take in this feeling

But water can't clean me

Not this

I feel dirty all over

It won't wash away

I scrub and I scrub

But the feeling, it stays

The burning memory

What you did

And it's wrong

I dress to go to bed

But I stay up all night long

Sleep comes in the morning

With you haunting my dreams

The fear in my heart

And your angers all I see


I walk down the street

And I wonder

Can anyone see?

Can they tell what I've been through?

Do they know what has been?

Or are they happy, ignorant?

Just like me, before that night...


I said no

And I can still feel you on me

And it burns, it burns

Like the tears in my dry eyes

I can still hear you yelling

Because I said no

I can still hear you laughing

About how far I wouldn't go

And I can still feel the pain

You said I deserved it

Because I said no

And you pinned me down

Because I said no
You wanted more

Because I said no

I said no


I had my innocence

But you took it away

Because I said no

You ripped my heart away

My life is so confusing

I can't say what I'll do

You're in my life, my memories

It makes every day hard

And that night, forever

Is eternalized in scars

It's okay. Your rhyming was okay too.

I think it's good. It captured my attention and made me feel what you wrote. 7.5

I like it a lot. The rhyming adds a great touch.

Why thank you. Its an english homework due in 1 week