Isolation.
Hatred, control.
Freedom.
Impossible future
and
dreams of perfection.

Inspirational lies
buried in your thoughts;
less colour,
less power.
Frozen emotions,
so still in the air,
like tiny miracles
yet to be reborn.

Close your eyes,
slowly, yet consciously,
and forget.
Inevitable failure, or
a challenge.
Reflect.

Unrealistic, unbearable -
your story.

--
Taylor``

A 2-minute poem.. I need criticism.

Sure? It has an unclear message. But I love it no matter what (:

Yeah I figured :P

It's just about someone reflecting on their life.. About someone who looks back and thinks about particular things they've had to go through.

If it still doesn't make sense, I can analyze the whole poem :P

Taylor``

I agree with nikki, it has an unclear message, but overall its pretty good!

^I agree with them, but I also liked it cuz it was like a collage of random thoughts going through your head

it's good

^Is that all you ever say? "its good" ??

Aw, people often say that.. but to me it makes sense somehow.. lol :P

Taylor``