deep in thought,
your on my mind,
your all i can think about,
your one of a kind.

i love you now,
and always will,
i will do anything for you,
i'd even kill .

youre the one who,
keeps my heart beating fast,
the one who i can turn to,
when i look at my past .

the smile on my face,
is because of you,
if i werent with you,
i dont know what i'd do.

i just want you to know,
that i love you with all my heart,
you mean the world to me,
nothing could ever tear us apart.



ok .. so the capitilization isnt there .. but i just started .. tell me what u think ..any advice ??

I don't think I can give you advice!
It was flawless, I loved it. One of my favorites.

Could you, like, use proper grammer? You're not your. Because you want to say you are, not that it's yours. And stop switching tenses.

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i will do anything for you,
i'd even kill .

You're saying will do and then would do. I'd = I would. Keep it the same. This following section doesn't fit your scheme, because you've ended two lines with the same word. It gets thrown off.

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is because of you,
if i werent with you,
i dont know what i'd do.

Other than that, it's nice.

thanks

yeah if i was u id jus switch a few things. i would first delete everything and start over again cuz that was just mess

It's simple and cute. but I didn't like it since it was sappy and really just ranting.