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xxxSiERRAxxx

Mar 14 2006, 08:47 PM

I guess I just thought of this..
Holy sh-t, I realized this is the first poem that wasn't for school..snap
I would love some critisism =)
So....here we go...

Sometimes We Forget

Sometimes we ~~forget~~
The simple things in life
Like sitting in the shade
Of your favorite apple tree
Or maybe we ~~forget~~
Just lying on the grass
Watching the cotton-candy clouds go by
I miss the crimson roses
And the beautiful night stars
I want to feel the sun
Wrap its warm arms around my shoulders
But I guess life is just too busy
To stop and smell the flowers.

iNyCxShoRT

Mar 14 2006, 10:26 PM

I like this poem, how you use a lot of descriptive words to hold the reader's attention.

xxxSiERRAxxx

Mar 15 2006, 10:40 PM

^^Yeah, I aggree
I just pretty much copied and pasted it from my sig, was too much in a hurry so didn't bother to take out all the prettiness.

--->Sierra

aubbob

Mar 15 2006, 10:52 PM

i lavvvv it. lol it was wonderful

hurtabit

Mar 16 2006, 12:10 AM

thats was great! i read it on ur sig. but it still was amazing! ur really good keep it up!

xosteffanator

Mar 25 2006, 04:40 PM

that was beautiful<3

Tribal J_Rome

Mar 26 2006, 02:05 AM

QUOTE(robb0 @ Mar 15 2006, 12:12 AM)

Nicely written, however it required me a lot of patience to actually read the damn thing because of the colors and such used.

You don't need to "pretty" up your writing if you are confident enough about it.

i agree lol. it's pretty, but all weird and distracting. i really like this one though, what it's about and everything

xstab.my.heartx

Mar 26 2006, 10:09 PM

It's cute.

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