A Theory on Love
Short Poetry....by Eria
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Confusion
A fusion of dank disillusion
With profound ideas made forlorn...

Defined with?
Monotony, a pledge for
monogamy to which we must conform!

Allision
The construction of two souls for another
But fission costs dear to the norm.

Defined with?
Fiction, a mix of contradiction
with fires brought up in the storm.
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Comments/Critique? What do you think?

It's consice and breif. I suggest writing more words to help the reader get an understanding of the feeling. What you did here is more of a lecture kinda...

but otherwise, I like the use of words and how everything fits in. propz!

Very nice. It's short, yes, but the use of words and the concept and mood of the poem makes up for its length. I like how you opened it and ended it. Good job!

It's sounds good =] your use of words were good, but maybe try using a little less, it gets confusing for some, you know?

It's great, it's short.. It's the thing I'd like to read!