Choke me
Use both hands
Pull me apart strand by strand
Crush into pieces
and bury into sand
How am i supposed to know exactly who i am?
I feel like shit....and....
there's nothing i can do about it.

Don't love me.
Why bother?
While im drowning in shallow water?
you broke me
maybe all for the better
my heart in a blender
but wouldn't you know it?...
i kept every one of your letters.

and i feel like shit...
but you dont know the half

Im lonely
but im not crying
these arent tears
i just have something in my eye
two storys told
One story ... lie.

and i feel like shit...
and you can never get enough

I hate you.

its good but are you trying to rhyme? because your rhyming couplets are everywhere and dont conform...

I agree with wind&fire. The rhyming scheme is really inconsistent, and when you do rhyme, it sounds childish ... I think the word choice could have been better. I like the concept though. I like these lines:

'Im lonely
but im not crying
these arent tears'

Nice job.

Hmm. Wow. I Love It.
Very Drama-esque.

Strongly Written.

LMFAO!!!
Since when does poetry have to rhyme? Or, "conform" for that matter. It doesn't. But thank you very much for your feedback everyone.

oh so you werent rhyming? then its good... i was just a little confused

Wow...that was beautiful!

Well, I was gonna copy and paste two lines into this..then three...then I realized that its true for the whole poem:

It absolutely describes my life right now...

Can I make an avatar for it? Please??

--->Sierra

wo0ow it seems like your about to kill your self or something.. like wow.. You might want to talk to somebody about these fellings.. o.O

i like it sometimes i feel like that.

Uh, I guess that you could make an avatar out of it. lol

Haha...I was just so happy when I saw that poem...I feel that way sooo much now with my group of friends....I had to send it to all of them saying that that's the way I've been feeling....

PM me!!

--->Sierra

I agree. Some of the rhyming kinda went off topic

For some reason, this poem seems like a rap to me. I still like it though, I can feel the emotion.