Ington
Dec 13 2005, 09:29 PM
This just flowed from me. It feels right.
A struggle from inside
Beneath the auricular surface
Of a pandemic existance
Beneath the flesh and encounters of the known
A glory created
Disposition
A crusade against the mass
Against the common form
A struggle from inside
-Ariel
mzislandpinay
Dec 13 2005, 09:41 PM
thats so emotional.
stephinika
Dec 14 2005, 12:11 AM
beautiful. i liked it. it does have quite the nice flow to it.
xblueradiance
Dec 20 2005, 05:54 PM
Oh, I like it! The words you used and the whole concept of the poem has a nice mood and flow to it. It's very deep. =]
Mikael
Dec 21 2005, 03:01 AM
this is nice. sounds like one of those pieces you'd hear at a bar, and then everyone starts snapping fingers like, yeah, yeah.
i admit, i googled up some of these words at first, i was like what, what?
illumineering
Dec 21 2005, 01:29 PM
Props to your teachers and/or your ability to express through an innate gift of writing. I hope to see more posts from you in the future. What a wonderful digression from the typical angst and melodrama of this forum!
not_your_average
Dec 21 2005, 05:16 PM
that was awesome! it seemed so genuine and fresh. keep it up, ariel!
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