I hustle till the sun come down, sun rise I wake up//
Back in the day my life was f**ked and it was hard to make up//
But I fought through the daze (days), and I got shit submitted//
My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!)
I buy money, know wat i mean??? I bring cash flow//
Only time you crash the audience is in a comedy show//
Mannn...I'm chilling in the weather, but I can't tell the forecast//
Cuz I'm getting a little hungry to death to rhyme, i still cant fasstttttt// (ouch)

do you really?

The end confused me. I liked that Daze [days] thing though.

Agreed. It made me go "WTF?!"

Oh and how do you BUY money? Are you involved with counterfeiting?

Exactly what I was thinking.....

OMG that was Crack Music!!!!!!!!!!!!!



I know what you mean. Man that was a hella proper line. The reason why no one gets it is because its one of those Young Jeezy type lines. You get it? get it?



The hunger for more.
That was a very nice ending. Props and Hats off.

that was stupid

what i was gonna say. do you actually do all that shit, or are you just saying it because?

I'll def give you props on your effort Jason, and the fact that you still post in here when 3/4 of the replies come back as "you suck" lol. Great job

i know what you mean. for those that dont get it, jasons lines are too advanced for you. wait 10 years and read it and youll feel like rkelly out of the closet


young jeezy would be proud

I don't think a gangsta wannabe can get any worse than this. You are sitting on a computer right now typing up these "rhymes" like you think you've even seen back in the day.

Since when did I become a gangsta wannabe?

Yeah the end was confusing.


Yeah I like that partt.

if you know what fasting is, the end is not confusing.

^LOL Robb you are slowman.

I can't consider rappers like 50 cent to be poets...

Poets = Kanye West, Common, Mos Def, Talib Kweli, Nas

here's the rule. twista has talent, tupac has soul, and the rest can all go home.

Back on topic. Jason, you should try using poetic devices such as internal rhyme and alliteration. Helps keep the flow when writing in long lines.

"Kangsta"?

"My air force ones, jeans, and my new york fitted// (YEP!)"?

...

Um, I know many koreans with the last name "Kang'" that nickname themself "Kangsta" and they don't certainly act like one aka "Wannabe"...Air Force Ones? How is that dressing gangsta? I've seen many geeks who wear them..they're just stylish sneakers...My new york fitted? OK, It's a f**king hat dumb ass, and it's a 'High-Quality' made by New Era. I wear it only when my hair is short. Jeans?

Just shut the f**k up and dont post, Katt.