f**k what i knew
what i didnt do
what i couldnt try
but wouldnt hide
nights get darker about now
the flash;light broke aroun a mile back
but flying blind is cool, i guess
better than sitting still
one day, we'll see how dumb we were
how dumb we probably still will be.
we Argonauts search for our own Golden Fleece
the cyclops looks out from the school window
Jason used a burning stake
Jimmy put a fag out in his eye.
f**k what i knew...
what i still could do
What i refuse to try
(heh. shy.)
and i will never hide

blaaaahh.. i just hate it when you use those words..

which words?

It's okay. Kind of an indirect message and hard to follow. I guess I'm just too stupid to interpret the poem.

^
thats a little moody...

I like it, it kinda catchy. Good job!

^ I like how you used the word f**k to catch the persons attention. drags you into the poem and makes you wonder why you used that word.

Nicely done.

i thought of another verse

f**k what i've seen
what i could have been
still, i never lie
and i never hide
Future B = second best
but, still better than the rest
Isn't that kind of quirky...
well, my crew went home at nine
cyclops down, now a labyrinth
trouble is, we have no thread
the Minator of authority...
makes me smile
yet i suppose its the thing i fear the most
hows THAT for irony?
we dont learn, dont map the maze
its cool to wonder lost
to f**k what you've seen
what you still have a chance to be
smoke, drink, steal, lie
but please, God, never make me hide

^ That new remake is ok but the last line sort of throws the rythym of the whole poem off.

^ that was intentional... its not a remake but an extention

^ ahhh icic.. Trying to give an audiene the feeling of wtheck is he trying to say kind of thing huh =P. Nice !