LOVE

An eternal despair fills thys pure heart
With a single doubt of fear cross thou eyes
With shattering glass filled with abstract art
Nocturnal darkness covers thys disguise
Thy lays one eye on thees exquisite face
And thy canst not remove thees hooked beauty
Remnants blood from thou veins, enmity trace
Amorous glance until thy off duty
Thou shall remove complete vindication
Eliminating dried color blood stain
The mountains roars with acceleration
And thou shall let go of revenge and pain
Thou and thee, is our love true and pure
With dove settings in the sky fills obscure

Aww... It's so pretty... I love it!

Rin-chan

Wow, that's a wonderful poem, sweet poem. I love the rhyme scheme and word usage. However, I think the words thy, thou and thee are used a bit too often. I can't quite follow the theme though. Is it love or despair?

Your use of thee, thy, thou, and thine are incorrect. Also, thys is not a word; thy is already a possessive pronoun.

It should be like this (pronoun -> possessive pronoun)

thou -> thy
thee (objective form of thou) -> thine

Wow.

Haha.

That's deep.

er, some of what Mipadi said.

But it's pretty intense, and I like it. ^_^