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I'm Terrible At This., Poem. :)
chrissyislame
post May 23 2009, 02:08 PM
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So this is a poem I wrote awhile ago, but it's probably one of my favorites I've written. :)

Years have passed
And people have come and gone
But the memories of you wont fade away
Youíre like a tumor that wonít stop growing
Itís just Iím terrible at saying this
I canít scream it out
Itís just so hard

The days have slowly gone by
My friends and family decreasing every day
You seemed to be the only one, only one
That ever impacted on me
Thoughts of you make me cry and weak
Iím terrible at saying how much I miss you
How much it doesnít feel like the same
I just cant

Itís hard, why canít it always be easy?
Why canít my mind let you go and live?
I canít tell you my lifeís great
Knowing your not here to share it with
It makes it harder to know we wont have moments
To laugh about
I hate knowing that Iím alone in this world
Iím terrible at saying how messed up I am
Telling the world all I need to do is let it out

With every second going by, I might smile a bit
Knowing that it brings me closer to seeing you again
Knowing I would hold you and tell you everything
How much I missed you
And how much I love you
Iím terrible at saying this but I need you
I canít do this a lone, Iím sorry

Tears will be shed
And too many nights will be wasted on you
How your not here and Iím too upset to go out
Too upset to live because of you
Iím terrible at saying this but someday I will live
I will live like you were here beside me

Iím terrible at saying this
Itís just awful to know Iíll move on
Itís sick to have this pain in me
Of how much I miss you
Soon, soon is will disappear.
Soon
 
butre
post May 23 2009, 02:10 PM
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No rhythm.
 
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post May 23 2009, 02:24 PM
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QUOTE(Buttsex @ May 23 2009, 03:10 PM) *
No rhythm.


agreed. not really any structure either.
 
butre
post May 23 2009, 02:30 PM
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No rhyme, rhythm, structure.

Would be alright in iambic pentameter. But it's not even close.
 

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