"I am Me" |
"I am Me" |
Dec 15 2009, 02:21 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 295 Joined: May 2007 Member No: 521,658 |
"I am Me"
I am not defined by career, education, social status, physical appearance, nor my failures. I am a genuinely good person that has slowly compromised their values. I am a corrupted person reconnecting their soul to the spirit. I have become defined by what I've let myself become. But I know who I am. I have not been myself, truly. Like a lesser parallel form of myself. I now want only to be me. Everything else will follow. |
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Dec 15 2009, 12:22 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 295 Joined: May 2007 Member No: 521,658 |
thank you for the compliment. i appreciate your thoughts
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Dec 15 2009, 04:47 PM
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/人◕‿‿◕人\ Group: Official Member Posts: 8,283 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 602,927 |
Content is pretty good, but it doesn't flow very well. It's a bit awkward to read.
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Dec 15 2009, 06:37 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 295 Joined: May 2007 Member No: 521,658 |
i didnt write this with the intent of making poetry (an entry in a diary of sorts). im happy you liked the content and would like to improve my poetry skills
thanks for the feedback itanium |
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Jan 23 2010, 01:05 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
From a poetry standpoint, I think that it works. Give or take a word. It's good. How long have you been writing?
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Jan 24 2010, 09:10 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 295 Joined: May 2007 Member No: 521,658 |
living and feeling all my life, just got to writing about a year ago. you have some good stuff i enjoy reading your poetry/stories as well
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Jan 25 2010, 07:42 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Thanks, it's been awhile since I've been on here. I still write, I just don't post anymore. I've gotten too lazy to and plus, no one ever really gives feedback here anymore so :/
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Jan 26 2010, 09:48 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 295 Joined: May 2007 Member No: 521,658 |
this is not the best forum for artistic forms of expression. i think im gonna try and locate one. ill let you know what i find
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