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Posted by: chrissyislame May 23 2009, 02:08 PM

So this is a poem I wrote awhile ago, but it's probably one of my favorites I've written. :)

Years have passed
And people have come and gone
But the memories of you wont fade away
You’re like a tumor that won’t stop growing
It’s just I’m terrible at saying this
I can’t scream it out
It’s just so hard

The days have slowly gone by
My friends and family decreasing every day
You seemed to be the only one, only one
That ever impacted on me
Thoughts of you make me cry and weak
I’m terrible at saying how much I miss you
How much it doesn’t feel like the same
I just cant

It’s hard, why can’t it always be easy?
Why can’t my mind let you go and live?
I can’t tell you my life’s great
Knowing your not here to share it with
It makes it harder to know we wont have moments
To laugh about
I hate knowing that I’m alone in this world
I’m terrible at saying how messed up I am
Telling the world all I need to do is let it out

With every second going by, I might smile a bit
Knowing that it brings me closer to seeing you again
Knowing I would hold you and tell you everything
How much I missed you
And how much I love you
I’m terrible at saying this but I need you
I can’t do this a lone, I’m sorry

Tears will be shed
And too many nights will be wasted on you
How your not here and I’m too upset to go out
Too upset to live because of you
I’m terrible at saying this but someday I will live
I will live like you were here beside me

I’m terrible at saying this
It’s just awful to know I’ll move on
It’s sick to have this pain in me
Of how much I miss you
Soon, soon is will disappear.
Soon

Posted by: Buttsex May 23 2009, 02:10 PM

No rhythm.

Posted by: DressYourEyelids May 23 2009, 02:24 PM

QUOTE(Buttsex @ May 23 2009, 03:10 PM) *
No rhythm.


agreed. not really any structure either.

Posted by: Buttsex May 23 2009, 02:30 PM

No rhyme, rhythm, structure.

Would be alright in iambic pentameter. But it's not even close.