Untitled, just a song thing-- STFU and read |
Untitled, just a song thing-- STFU and read |
Jun 8 2008, 10:10 AM
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[Insert something Witty Here] Group: Member Posts: 363 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 598,828 |
Do you just like breaking my heart
leaving me to pick up the pieces How can you say something like that and then expect me to want you back You were my everything You were the center of my world Everything I thought I knew Falls around before me If only you could see me now In a world where pain is king I don't understand how I bought every one of your lies You say you loved me but now your with him so what now What will I do now Just fading away You were my Everything You were the center of my world Everything I thought I knew Falls before me Well I guess things never last I only hoped it would That we would be together and we thought we could How does it feel now To know what you have done I hope you realize that I am more than I seem You were my everything You were the center of my world Everything I knew falls before me I wish you could've been more like her I am happy now You still lie in the dark Don't expect me to save you know I Know How It all goes down |
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Jun 8 2008, 10:36 AM
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Custom Member Title Group: Member Posts: 655 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 619,464 |
That thing totaly sucks.
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Jun 8 2008, 11:07 AM
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[Insert something Witty Here] Group: Member Posts: 363 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 598,828 |
why?
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Jun 8 2008, 11:09 AM
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Custom Member Title Group: Member Posts: 655 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 619,464 |
no rhymes
no originality and this is a subject that everybody use and it's bad written and it's " gay " I can make a better thing than that in 2 minutes |
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Jun 8 2008, 06:49 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 5,166 Joined: Oct 2007 Member No: 585,858 |
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Aug 5 2008, 01:58 AM
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Senior Member Group: Posts: 8,274 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,001 |
I like it.
It keeps your thoughts simple and concise. it doesn't need to be poetic or rhetorical, but as long it expresses your thoughts and "get this crap" out, then that's all it matters. |
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Aug 5 2008, 02:07 AM
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/人◕‿‿◕人\ Group: Official Member Posts: 8,283 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 602,927 |
Check any typical blog on myspace, and you're bound to find something like this. Although it is fairly well written, there is no originality here at all. |
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Aug 30 2008, 01:54 AM
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Mais je ne l'aime pas Group: Member Posts: 971 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 108,135 |
There's nothing that feels fresh with this.
The same old heartbroken theme. The problem is that people simplify their writing so much that it loses all sense of poeticism. Clear and concise is good. Just don't go too far. |
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