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Poem of the Month, Romance, Creative Writing
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post Feb 17 2009, 01:56 PM
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You whisper into my ear Sweet things that make me weak, Then you look into my eyes
With your mysterious provocative gaze, Causing you to touch my skin To feel the burning of your flames,
Caressing me with a love that is real,Then you kiss me...As I feel your wet eager lips Our hungry tongues indulging in their craving,To feel the poison...Of your blood boiling throughout your soul Sending electrify emotions Stimulating pure intoxication, As your hands flows over me; Touching every curve and

very part of me... It seems I move my legs apart automatically,As you lift me on the mystical ride
While my body you know I will guide,Just listen to our song Making love all night long,The flames of passion, desire and love Is taking control over us,You put your hands in my breast,As I feel a sensation

so exciting, When you kiss my nipples with your eager lips Every time you do that, It gets more and more fulfilling Let me feel those sensations, As I feel you deep inside me Feeling a rage so incredible to resist,
As all I want is to let go Of all this love I have in store, You got me twisting...Soaking wet, I feel you as you are pausing deep inside me And then I feel you pull out and pull back in, I moan from pure delight and ecstasy, I get the shivers, But... Is from the fire lit inside my being My body is slippery everywhere,
I scream...Please, harder and harder, I call out your name... Crying out in anguished bliss
A slight sigh...''A gasp for air'' This fire is so immense So full of energy and heat, Even water could not quench This fire inside of me, Cause your love... Always will remain Burning there endlessly,
Cause you make my erotic senses rise, While you take me higher and higher Than I have ever been
In the mystical ride of yours, That I just can't get enough Because without you and your love,
There would not be a hot sexual taste in me.
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post Feb 17 2009, 04:43 PM
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So I clearly have gotten no replies. All I'm asking is what do you think. Is it good? Is it sexy? Great? What? I think I should rename the title so people could actually read it.
 
Harp
post Feb 17 2009, 04:47 PM
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Chill out.
 
karmakiller
post Feb 17 2009, 04:52 PM
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Give it some time. The Writing forum isn't the most active on here. Plus, your poem is kind of hard to read because of the red, centered text pinch.gif
 
Firiath
post Feb 19 2009, 12:04 AM
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O.O
*stamps R onto it*
xDDDD
 
Ekay
post Feb 23 2009, 04:57 PM
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your poem reminds me of a book called Shadow Game. have you ever read it before?
 
MrStrife
post Jul 22 2009, 02:06 PM
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This poem makes me want to have sex. Some birthday.gif sex. lolz
 

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